big bro fan
19-09-2005, 16:48
hi this is my own soap called hutton square which is a estate with a shop pub garage and a cafe. please give me some feedback so here is my first episode
hutton square
episode 1
scene 1
the williams family kitchen
spencer:i know your our sister and everything sharon but your like a mum to us.
sharon:well someones got to feed you and ricky
spencer looks at the clock
spencer:well better get going dont want to be late for the office
spencer leaves sharon walks into the living room and picks up a photo
sharon:i miss you mum and dad
ricky comes downstairs
ricky:whats up sharon
sharon:nothing just miss mum and dad thats all
ricky:well why dont you call them
sharon:yeah i think i will
scene 2
bob and vivs shop
viv:bob did you notice anything wrong with craig this morning
bob:no love why did you
viv:yeah a mother can always tell these things
bob:what things
viv:i think he wants a job he's always looking so bored, im going over the pub back soon
scene 3
the greyhound
grant:what can i get ya max
max:just a pint please grant
grant pulls max's pint
grant:so not opening up today
max:nah it's so hard running a garage with one man
viv walks in
viv:g and t please grant
grant:coming up
max:hey viv whats your craig up to these days
viv:not much why
max:could you ask him to meet me in here tonight about eight
viv:yeah allright then
scene 4
sharon spencer and rickys house
sharon picks up the phone and dials a number
sharon:hello mum it's me
scene 5
the market
craig walks over to dennis's stall
craig:dennis have you got any jobs going
dennis:sorry craig
viv runs over
viv:craig max said he wants to meet you in the pub later
craig:what for
viv:dont know
craig:thanks for me letting me know mum bye
dennis:have you ever thought of running a market stall viv
viv:no
dennis:well if anyone you know wants to bye one let me know
viv:allright then
scene 6
the cafe
spencer walks in
spencer:tea please peggy
peggy:allright darling
spencer walks over to sharon
spencer:whats up
sharon:meet me in the pub tonight i have an announcement to make
spencer: see you later then
scene 7
tina and alfie's house
tina:grandad
alfie:yes tina
tina:do you want to go to the pub later
alfie:yeah allright then i can meet pauline and jim
scene 8
ricky sharon and spencers house
sharon;ricky are you ready
ricky comes downstairs
sharon:wow nice six pack
ricky:thanks have you seen my shirt
sharon:yeah in the lounge
scene 9
the greyhound
max spots craig come in
max:craig over here
craig:allright max so what did you want to meet me for
max:well i want to know if you want a job
craig:yeah that would be great
viv bob pauline and jim walk in
craig:mum dad nan grandad i got a job
jim:welldone son
craig:thanks grandad
sharon ricky and spencer walk in
sharon:grant can i make an announcement
grant:sure
sharon:everyone i just want to say that im moving to spain to get my mum and dad come home
pub goes quiet
spencer:well then i guess im coming with you
sharon looks and smiles
spencer:heres to spain
hutton square
episode 1
scene 1
the williams family kitchen
spencer:i know your our sister and everything sharon but your like a mum to us.
sharon:well someones got to feed you and ricky
spencer looks at the clock
spencer:well better get going dont want to be late for the office
spencer leaves sharon walks into the living room and picks up a photo
sharon:i miss you mum and dad
ricky comes downstairs
ricky:whats up sharon
sharon:nothing just miss mum and dad thats all
ricky:well why dont you call them
sharon:yeah i think i will
scene 2
bob and vivs shop
viv:bob did you notice anything wrong with craig this morning
bob:no love why did you
viv:yeah a mother can always tell these things
bob:what things
viv:i think he wants a job he's always looking so bored, im going over the pub back soon
scene 3
the greyhound
grant:what can i get ya max
max:just a pint please grant
grant pulls max's pint
grant:so not opening up today
max:nah it's so hard running a garage with one man
viv walks in
viv:g and t please grant
grant:coming up
max:hey viv whats your craig up to these days
viv:not much why
max:could you ask him to meet me in here tonight about eight
viv:yeah allright then
scene 4
sharon spencer and rickys house
sharon picks up the phone and dials a number
sharon:hello mum it's me
scene 5
the market
craig walks over to dennis's stall
craig:dennis have you got any jobs going
dennis:sorry craig
viv runs over
viv:craig max said he wants to meet you in the pub later
craig:what for
viv:dont know
craig:thanks for me letting me know mum bye
dennis:have you ever thought of running a market stall viv
viv:no
dennis:well if anyone you know wants to bye one let me know
viv:allright then
scene 6
the cafe
spencer walks in
spencer:tea please peggy
peggy:allright darling
spencer walks over to sharon
spencer:whats up
sharon:meet me in the pub tonight i have an announcement to make
spencer: see you later then
scene 7
tina and alfie's house
tina:grandad
alfie:yes tina
tina:do you want to go to the pub later
alfie:yeah allright then i can meet pauline and jim
scene 8
ricky sharon and spencers house
sharon;ricky are you ready
ricky comes downstairs
sharon:wow nice six pack
ricky:thanks have you seen my shirt
sharon:yeah in the lounge
scene 9
the greyhound
max spots craig come in
max:craig over here
craig:allright max so what did you want to meet me for
max:well i want to know if you want a job
craig:yeah that would be great
viv bob pauline and jim walk in
craig:mum dad nan grandad i got a job
jim:welldone son
craig:thanks grandad
sharon ricky and spencer walk in
sharon:grant can i make an announcement
grant:sure
sharon:everyone i just want to say that im moving to spain to get my mum and dad come home
pub goes quiet
spencer:well then i guess im coming with you
sharon looks and smiles
spencer:heres to spain